The Question
"The work of individuals was the main reason for changes in the treatment of prisoners in the years c1700–c1900." How far do you agree? Explain your answer.
You may use the following in your answer:
• John Howard
• The Separate System
You must also use information of your own.
What Examiners Want
AO1 6 marks + AO2 10 marks + SPaG 4 marks. A balanced argument: paragraphs supporting and challenging the statement, with a clear judgement. AO2 dominates — significance, weighing of factors, sustained argument.
Model Answer
Introduction: I partially agree that individuals were the main reason for changes in the treatment of prisoners c1700–c1900. Reformers like John Howard and Elizabeth Fry undeniably exposed abuses and inspired change. However, their work was only effective because of wider factors — changing attitudes, government action and new ideas about rehabilitation — which together transformed prison life more profoundly than any single person.
Paragraph 1 — Agreeing: John Howard (prompt 1): Individuals were certainly a major driver of change. In 1777, the Bedfordshire sheriff John Howard published The State of the Prisons in England and Wales, exposing filth, disease (gaol fever killed more prisoners than execution), corrupt jailers paid only by inmate fees, and the mixing of debtors with violent offenders. This mattered because, before Howard, the public had no idea what conditions inside prisons were really like — his evidence shocked Parliament and led directly to the 1779 Penitentiary Act, which called for healthy, single-cell prisons with paid jailers. Similarly, Elizabeth Fry from 1813 worked tirelessly at Newgate prison, founding the Association for the Reformation of Female Prisoners (1817), introducing female warders for women, education and Bible-reading. Without these individuals personally entering prisons and writing reports, government would have had no evidence to act on — so they were indispensable catalysts.
Paragraph 2 — Agreeing further: The Separate System (prompt 2): Individual ideas also drove the design of new prisons. The "Separate System" — based on the writings of reformers like Jonas Hanway and adopted at Pentonville Prison (opened 1842) — kept each inmate alone in a cell, with masked exercise and silent worship, in the belief that solitude would lead to repentance. This was a direct product of individual thinking about how prisons could rehabilitate, not just punish. The system was so admired it was copied in 54 prisons across England by 1877. Captain Alexander Maconochie's "marks system" in Australia (from 1840) also rewarded good behaviour with earlier release — the forerunner of modern parole. These show that without individual visionaries, the modern idea of rehabilitation simply would not exist.
Paragraph 3 — Challenging: Government & Attitudes: However, individuals alone could not have changed prisons — government action and shifting public attitudes were equally important. The 1823 Gaols Act, passed by Robert Peel, made regular inspections, paid jailers, female warders, and chaplains compulsory — only government legislation could enforce reform nationwide. Howard's report had been published 46 years earlier; without state action, his ideas would have remained on paper. Likewise, the 1865 Prisons Act standardised diet and discipline across all prisons, and the 1877 Prisons Act brought all prisons under central government control for the first time. Attitudes also changed — Enlightenment thinkers like Beccaria in 1764 had argued that punishment should be proportionate, and by the Victorian era reformist Christianity made the public more willing to fund cleaner, healthier prisons. Individuals were the spark, but only when politics and society were ready to listen.
Paragraph 4 — Challenging: End of Transportation & the Bloody Code: An even broader factor was the collapse of alternatives. Until 1868, transportation to Australia removed roughly 162,000 convicts. When it ended (Australia refused further convicts), Britain suddenly needed to house all its prisoners at home — forcing the construction of dozens of new prisons including Wormwood Scrubs (1875). This was a structural, not personal, cause of change. Similarly, the Bloody Code's collapse — capital offences cut from over 200 in 1815 to just 5 by 1861 — meant far more offenders went to prison rather than to the gallows. No reformer caused these shifts; economic and political circumstances did. They forced prison change whether reformers existed or not.
Conclusion: Overall, I agree to a limited extent. Individuals like Howard and Fry were vital — they provided the evidence, the moral pressure and the new ideas. But their impact depended entirely on government legislation (1779, 1823, 1865, 1877 Acts), changing attitudes about rehabilitation, and structural pressures like the end of transportation. The most accurate view is that individuals were the catalyst, but government and circumstance were the engine of lasting change in the treatment of prisoners.
Mark Breakdown — Level 4 (13–16 marks)
AO1 · 6 marks
Wide, accurate, precise: Howard 1777, Fry 1813/1817, Pentonville 1842, Gaols Act 1823, Maconochie 1840, transportation end 1868, Bloody Code stats, 1815→1861.
AO2 · 10 marks
Sustained, balanced analysis. Weighs individuals against government, attitudes, structural causes. Explicit, prioritised judgement.
SPaG · 4 marks
Consistent accuracy in spelling/punctuation. Wide range of specialist terms used correctly: "Penitentiary", "Separate System", "transportation", "Bloody Code", "rehabilitation".
Essay Plan Template — Use this for any 16-marker
¶1 Intro: State your judgement up front ("I partially/largely/disagree because..."). Name 3 factors you'll discuss.
¶2 Agree (Prompt 1): Strongest evidence supporting the statement.
¶3 Agree (Prompt 2): Second supporting paragraph.
¶4 Challenge (own knowledge): Strongest alternative factor.
¶5 Challenge: Second alternative factor (only if time).
¶6 Conclusion: Prioritised judgement — why one factor outweighs the others.
Golden rule: Make a "mini-judgement" at the end of every paragraph ("This shows that..."). Examiners look for sustained evaluation, not just balance.
Technique Tip
The 16-marker is won or lost in judgement. Saying "individuals were important and government was important" is Level 2. Saying "individuals provided the spark, but government provided the engine — without legislation, Howard's report would have remained ink on a page" is Level 4. Prioritise. Weigh. Decide.